A Note
Hello and welcome to my blog! This is my post for the Spooktoberfest blog hop, 269 words with the 5 key words: Cobweb, Cauldron, Jack-o-lantern, Ghost and Razor. The inspiration for this piece of flash fiction came from a book I am reading called, “Surviving the Angel of Death: The Story of a Mengele Twin in Auschwitz,” by Eva Mozes Kor and Lisa Rojany Buccieri. Some of the atrocities I’m reading about that took place in Auschwitz made me so mad and sad that the result was the following short story out of my emotional response. Certainly not a Halloween theme, but something I felt compelled to write.
The Time Renegades
by Siobhan Minty
They had materialized in Poland 1944 at Auschwitz concentration camp, a group of time travellers determined to set right all of history’s wrongs. There was nothing that could stop them. No tyrant in history stood a chance against the advanced technology of their weapons.
The rain beat down on Ghost, Cobweb, Jack-o-Lantern, Cauldron and Razor as they stood in front of the gates of one of the most horrible places on earth even as Nazis from within the gates shot at them and shouted in German. The bullets deflected off of the dome-like energy shield that protected the group of futuristic soldiers.
“Oh no, don’t hurt us... Fools don’t have a clue who they’re dealing with,” said Razor, a codename given to her by Ghost for her cutting sarcasm.
Cobweb, a wisp of a thing with hair as silver as a spider’s web, sighed. She looked at Ghost. “Captain, once we’re through here, you think we can take a break somewhere peaceful? Jumping back and forth in time like this is exhausting.”
Ghost charged his gun. He motioned to the rest to do the same. “Focus on the task at hand then we’ll talk.”
Cauldron, a bear of a man, gently put his hand on Cobweb’s shoulder. “Don’t worry. We’ll get a break soon. You know how the Cap is when he’s in fight-mode.”
“Y’all ready?” asked Ghost.
Jack Lannturn (a.k.a. Jack-o-Lantern) spit on the ground, something he did when he was in a place he despised, and pulled his Ray-Bans over his eyes. “Let’s get ‘er done.”
Ghost nodded. “Don’t retreat until all of the Nazis are dead.”
Very clever use of the names with the description of the people. I hope soldiers of the future will come up with better tag lines besides "Let's get 'er done." haha. Nice job.
ReplyDeleteHahaha... when I was writing this story I pictured these soldiers to be not all that sophisticated, though passionate about what they did. Tried to think of something more clever, but just seemed like something Jack Lannturn would say ;)
DeleteI loved how you used them as names! Remined me of Watchmen. I think I need to read "Surviving the Angel of Death: The Story of a Mengele Twin in Auschwitz,” by Eva Mozes Kor and Lisa Rojany Buccieri.
ReplyDeleteloved that! time travel! heroes! kill the nazis! and the names & descriptions were fabulous! glad i stopped by!
ReplyDeleteSo well told, the names, the descriptions, and time travel. If only...
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing.
What a premise. Sounds like a great series is fermenting. Thanks for the story.
ReplyDeleteVon L Cid
So good!!! Great idea with the name usage!
ReplyDeleteThanks for participating in our blogfest. :D
Wonderful names:) And a great idea. I'd read more, if these was more :)
ReplyDeletewow. Really neat idea with the names. I love what you did with this. I'm a new follower btw. It's nice to meet you!
ReplyDeleteThanks! And welcome!
DeleteIf only it could be done! A creative idea accomplished very well.
ReplyDeleteNice to meet you Siobhan
ReplyDeleteNow that would be fantastic if only we could change some history. Well written, love the names, great job.
Nancy
I really dig how you used the five words, and that you provided descriptions of the folks they named. Great work!
ReplyDeleteClever idea to use the words as names!
ReplyDeleteClever idea and way to use the required words! I liked the feel of this story. It'd be fun to read more of their adventures.
ReplyDeletegreat entry. loved the play on the name jack lannturn. creative! bloghopping and new follower, hi!
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