Here is my entry for Rachel Harrie's Second Campaign Challenge:
(Prompt 4) |
We dig in the trash, the filthy trash, my brother, sister and I. Most days we find ourselves here, scrounging for treasures: scraps of metal, worn tires, anything that may be of value we can sell.
No matter how many treasures we find it will not make Mother better. On this day I find a surprising treasure. A ring.
Mandeep snatches it from me. “Nandini! We are rich!”
I know I should be happy but all I can think about is our mother lying on her side, a mat of woven grass beneath her. Her lips are cracked, her eyes devoid of awareness. Where has she gone, the woman with the bright eyes who used to fill our home with laughter? She cannot even drink the water we dribble into her mouth. My father pretends as if she is sleeping ... you cannot fool a child who has grown up on the streets of Calcutta.
As my brother turns the ring around in his fingers I realize that Mother deserves more than to die in an inferno of a hut, flies perched on her sweating face.I snatch back the ring. “It is my burial gift for Mother.”
Wow! This is powerful. Emotions on several levels. I'm in awe.
ReplyDeleteOh, so sad. Gripping. (#30)
ReplyDeleteHoly. Man. This is powerful. It's hard to capture emotion with a word limit. But that didn't stop you. Really great work here. "liked" and a new follower... I'll look forward to your future posts ;)
ReplyDeleteCongratulations! You have been shortlisted to move onto stage two.
ReplyDeleteGreat story! It's so touching.
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Oh, Siobhan. Talk about KA-POW! such incredible imagery and understated emotion. Well done!
ReplyDeleteSo sad. And so selfless of her to want to give it for her mother rather than use it for herself.
ReplyDeleteTugged at my heart. Nice entry.
ReplyDeleteMelissa Maygrove #14
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A very powerfully emotional story, well done!
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written. Very moving, I loved it.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful and sad that he realizes the end is near no matter what they do. And so sweet that his only thought is to take care of her. I loved that picture.
ReplyDeleteGood luck in the contest! Very moving really!
Take care,
Jenn (2nd challenge entry #84)